Post by Naoki09 on Jun 28, 2005 13:04:22 GMT -5
Furi Kuri United 2
Its been over a year… a year… FF.net deleted the original for being in “Script Format” I didn’t back my files up so all was gone when my computer was erased. I’ve started drafts before and posted one chapter… but I’m not doing that this time. I am going to finish all 20 Chapters. They will be set to have a minimum of 1,000 words a chapter and I will be going in movie script format. My hero Crobdan inspired me to write again. Thanks to everyone who supported last years work.
CHANGES:
I’ve set a few things different this time. I have reset all love interest stuff. The pairings will be Haruko-Mamimi-EriXNaota. Who will win? No one knows. This time I’m making Mitch a more minor character… He’ll still be around but will not steel anyone’s favorite character from Naota. He will not have a love interest. Basically I am saying that I don’t want to replace Naota with myself. I am one of you. Who wants to read about only someone they do not know? Also… Weapons sets will be different and to all those non-military people, I will add a definition next to the word the first time it’s used. Most off, I took the N/O ability away from Mitch because… well read above. I cant even remember what I left off at last time… Heh.
Recently:
The United States Air Force General Mitch Templeton and his friend Kallen Mjoen show up at the Shigekuni bakery in the rain. They had deserted for unknown reasons (find out soon) and are let in by Haruko (Alternate ending. Episode 6 never occurred.) much to Naota’s dismay. Soon after, they meet another person, Kohora, who settles in with them to find Naota. They track the location to a space station in, well, space. They Hijack (now wanted by Interpol) the USS Atlantis Space Shuttle and Haruko flies them to their location. Once there, they raid the station stealthily and Find Naota. On there way out they confront the evil Italian stereotype, Chef Tony. He attacks them and fatally wounds Kallen and escapes in a life pod after near defeat. They head back to the bakery and hang out with Crobdan (Me and him intertwine characters from stories) until further notice. After watching TV, they realize Japan has been invaded by China and the United States was allied with Japan. That’s were are story continues.
If there are any errors it is because I write at around 000-300 hours…
I do not accept Flamers but Constructive Criticism is nice. R&R please!
ON WITH THE LONG AWAITED SHOW
The night air bristled around his neck. He wore a heavy coat to protect against the Chinese winters. The snow blew into his face and he took a single hand to wipe it away.
He trudged through the deepest snow he’d seen in his 14 years. Yes, Naota Nandaba, along with Haruhara Haruko, and Mitchell Templeton made they’re way through the Chinese countryside along the now frozen Irtysh River. They were on the outskirts of the small city of Burquin, located almost on the border of Russia and China. This mission was given to them about six weeks ago.
It was a cool day, mid October, and Naota sat on the couch watching “The Worlds Funniest Tornado’s Volume 1” Haruko was eating potato chips next to him lazily and Mitch was no were to be seen. Crobdan sat around thinking of more quotes to piss Mitch off with.
Naota: This is the lamest piece of garbage I’ve ever watched.
Haruko: Well it was imported from the U.S.
Naota: Well that explains it. Those Americans can’t make movies worth shit.
Haruko: What’s wrong with them? I mean, its still funny. I mean, a guy getting hit in the groin with a stop sign has to be funny or what else is?
Naota: I see your point…
The phone rang and Haruko and Naota exchanged glances.
Naota: You get it.
Haruko: Its ok, you can do it.
Naota: Naa… you go ahead.
Haruko: This is a cheap way for the author to get more words…
Naota: What?
Haruko: Oh its nothing… heheheh…. Ya….
Naota sighs and gets up to retrieve the phone. He picks it up to hear a professional voice.
: Excuse me, but I need to speak urgently Naota Nandaba.
Naota looked confused but wouldn’t know the difference.
Naota: Who are you? I am Naota.
: That’s not important. What is important is that god has chosen you.
His look turned to shock and he wondered with extreme curiosity who this was.
Naota: Wh-who is this?
: I am… your mom.
Naota: That shit isn’t funny anymore! It never was!
Crobdan: (distantly) Amen brother!
: Well, it is here. Anyway. God has chosen you for a task. You must initiate intercourse with any woman of your choosing! The fate of the world depends on it! Be it Brittany Spea-
Naota: She’s a whore!
: That’s what makes it interesting! Anyways… you must have children to save the world.
Naota: I can’t believe this is happening. I never dreamed this would happen! I can’t believe it! There is a god! THERE IS A GOD! IS THIS FOR REAL?!
: Na, I’m just screwin with ya!
Naota does a face drop on the floor and the phone hangs up. Haruko yells from the couch.
Haruko: You ok? Who was that?
Naota was to busy crying.
Naota: The world is so mean…
The phone rings again and Naota doesn’t get up. With a deep sigh, Haruko lifts herself up and answers it.
Haruko: Yes?
: Is General Templeton available? This is urgent.
Haruko: Who are you first?
: My name is General John Cock.
Haruko bursts out laughing and falls over.
Haruko: Are you serious? That’s so sad! Cock…
Cock: Hey! You shut up! It’s not fair! Waah!!!
Cocks voice is heard trailing of and in the background she could hear numerous employees laughing at him. Another voice came to the line.
: My name is General Larson. We need to speak to General Templeton
Haruko: He be General no more.
Larson: We know he ditched but we need his help.
Haruko: Isn’t this clichéd?
Larson: … No.
Haruko made her way up the stairs avoiding Naota’s underwear and other junk laying around. She quietly looked into the room and saw Mitch digging through Naota’s clothes. Haruko couldn’t help but watch and soon found herself wanting to watch.
Mitch finally got to the bottom and pulled out a magazine.
Mitch: Grow up my ass Naota! You’re the one with porn! Hah… what is this? Bondage? Eww… who would of thought Naota liked that? Who would of thought that I would be talking to myself anyways?
Haruko decided to walk in and she scared the shit out of him.
Mitch froze when he heard the footsteps.
Mitch: Naota… stay calm… this isn’t what you think… I’m just gunna’ get up and leave… Stay calm…
Haruko smirked finding this humorous. She tapped her foot to imitate Naota now to.
Mitch: Ok… um… DIE BASTARD!
To Haruko’s surprise he leaped up quickly landing on the top bunk agily.
Mitch: Didn’t know I could jump so hi-OH GOD I PULLED A MSUCLE!
As quickly as he was up he fell off with a crack.
Haruko: You might not wanna mess up Takkun’s magazines… I knew he’d grow up someday.
Mitch: Jesus! Agh! It hurts so bad!
Haruko: That’s cause you’re a dumb shit.
Mitch: Oh shut up. Let’s see another normal human jump 6 feet from a crouching position!
Haruko: Whatever. Phone call.
She hands him the phone. He could only look at her with a “WTF!?” Look because no one knew he was there.
Mitch: Um.. Hello?
Larson: JESUS! I SPENT 5 FUCKING MINUTES WAITING FOR YOU TO GET TO THE PHONE!
Mitch: Wow that sucks for you.
Larson: (clears throat) Well anyways. You know of the Chinese invasion…?
Mitch: Yes! They always squint at me! It’s like they can barley see! Like that Pokemon guy!
Larson: Ermm… ya ok. Well anyway. You are the old General Templeton?
Mitch froze for a moment.
Mitch: How did they know? Um… yes.
Larson: Thank god. We need your help! We hav-
Mitch: Hell no. After what you guys did to me… Never again.
Larson: Well we can pay you money.
Mitch: No.
Larson: Women?
Mitch:… No.
Larson: Men?
Mitch: … Dude. Im not gay.
Larson: Just checking.
Mitch: I am gunna kick his ass. Haha! Ok… Well give me all 50 state quarters!
Larson: Wha-What? Why that? ‘
Mitch: I have a quarter fetish.
Larson: Erm… ok… Done. Now will you help?
Mitch: No.
Mitch slams the phone and is about to leave when it rings again.
Mitch: Fine… what do you want.
: Tell Kamon Nandaba his blow up doll arrived.
Mitch: Oo
: Oh… you arnt not the delivery boy. Oh well.
He hangs it up and it rings once more.
Mitch: Haruko can you cut the line?
Haruko is now lying on her bunk.
Haruko: Nope. Talk to him.
Mitch picks up the phone.
Mitch: Larson?
Larson: Yes.
Mitch: I’ll help… If you give me a cookie.
Larson: What the fuck?
Mitch: I suddenly have a cookie craving.
Larson: DAMNIT! WE NEED YOU TO INFILTRATE A DAMNED CHINESE BASE AND RETRIEVE SOME IMPORTANT SHIT!
Mitch: Sure why not?
So our hero’s set off armed and loaded.
I am so fucking tired. Well… this will be my shortest chapter as it was more of an introduction. No flames please… please no flames. Yawn… neways I will update as soon as I get 5 reviews. I will use more descriptive language and add more character usage.
Its been over a year… a year… FF.net deleted the original for being in “Script Format” I didn’t back my files up so all was gone when my computer was erased. I’ve started drafts before and posted one chapter… but I’m not doing that this time. I am going to finish all 20 Chapters. They will be set to have a minimum of 1,000 words a chapter and I will be going in movie script format. My hero Crobdan inspired me to write again. Thanks to everyone who supported last years work.
CHANGES:
I’ve set a few things different this time. I have reset all love interest stuff. The pairings will be Haruko-Mamimi-EriXNaota. Who will win? No one knows. This time I’m making Mitch a more minor character… He’ll still be around but will not steel anyone’s favorite character from Naota. He will not have a love interest. Basically I am saying that I don’t want to replace Naota with myself. I am one of you. Who wants to read about only someone they do not know? Also… Weapons sets will be different and to all those non-military people, I will add a definition next to the word the first time it’s used. Most off, I took the N/O ability away from Mitch because… well read above. I cant even remember what I left off at last time… Heh.
Recently:
The United States Air Force General Mitch Templeton and his friend Kallen Mjoen show up at the Shigekuni bakery in the rain. They had deserted for unknown reasons (find out soon) and are let in by Haruko (Alternate ending. Episode 6 never occurred.) much to Naota’s dismay. Soon after, they meet another person, Kohora, who settles in with them to find Naota. They track the location to a space station in, well, space. They Hijack (now wanted by Interpol) the USS Atlantis Space Shuttle and Haruko flies them to their location. Once there, they raid the station stealthily and Find Naota. On there way out they confront the evil Italian stereotype, Chef Tony. He attacks them and fatally wounds Kallen and escapes in a life pod after near defeat. They head back to the bakery and hang out with Crobdan (Me and him intertwine characters from stories) until further notice. After watching TV, they realize Japan has been invaded by China and the United States was allied with Japan. That’s were are story continues.
If there are any errors it is because I write at around 000-300 hours…
I do not accept Flamers but Constructive Criticism is nice. R&R please!
ON WITH THE LONG AWAITED SHOW
The night air bristled around his neck. He wore a heavy coat to protect against the Chinese winters. The snow blew into his face and he took a single hand to wipe it away.
He trudged through the deepest snow he’d seen in his 14 years. Yes, Naota Nandaba, along with Haruhara Haruko, and Mitchell Templeton made they’re way through the Chinese countryside along the now frozen Irtysh River. They were on the outskirts of the small city of Burquin, located almost on the border of Russia and China. This mission was given to them about six weeks ago.
It was a cool day, mid October, and Naota sat on the couch watching “The Worlds Funniest Tornado’s Volume 1” Haruko was eating potato chips next to him lazily and Mitch was no were to be seen. Crobdan sat around thinking of more quotes to piss Mitch off with.
Naota: This is the lamest piece of garbage I’ve ever watched.
Haruko: Well it was imported from the U.S.
Naota: Well that explains it. Those Americans can’t make movies worth shit.
Haruko: What’s wrong with them? I mean, its still funny. I mean, a guy getting hit in the groin with a stop sign has to be funny or what else is?
Naota: I see your point…
The phone rang and Haruko and Naota exchanged glances.
Naota: You get it.
Haruko: Its ok, you can do it.
Naota: Naa… you go ahead.
Haruko: This is a cheap way for the author to get more words…
Naota: What?
Haruko: Oh its nothing… heheheh…. Ya….
Naota sighs and gets up to retrieve the phone. He picks it up to hear a professional voice.
: Excuse me, but I need to speak urgently Naota Nandaba.Naota looked confused but
wouldn’t know the difference.Naota: Who are you? I am Naota.
: That’s not important. What is important is that god has chosen you.His look turned to shock and he wondered with extreme curiosity who this was.
Naota: Wh-who is this?
: I am… your mom. Naota: That shit isn’t funny anymore! It never was!
Crobdan: (distantly) Amen brother!
: Well, it is here. Anyway. God has chosen you for a task. You must initiate intercourse with any woman of your choosing! The fate of the world depends on it! Be it Brittany Spea- Naota: She’s a whore!
: That’s what makes it interesting! Anyways… you must have children to save the world.Naota: I can’t believe this is happening. I never dreamed this would happen! I can’t believe it! There is a god! THERE IS A GOD! IS THIS FOR REAL?!
: Na, I’m just screwin with ya!Naota does a face drop on the floor and the phone hangs up. Haruko yells from the couch.
Haruko: You ok? Who was that?
Naota was to busy crying.
Naota: The world is so mean…
The phone rings again and Naota doesn’t get up. With a deep sigh, Haruko lifts herself up and answers it.
Haruko: Yes?
: Is General Templeton available? This is urgent. Haruko: Who are you first?
: My name is General John Cock. Haruko bursts out laughing and falls over.
Haruko: Are you serious? That’s so sad! Cock…
Cock: Hey! You shut up! It’s not fair! Waah!!!
Cocks voice is heard trailing of and in the background she could hear numerous employees laughing at him. Another voice came to the line.
: My name is General Larson. We need to speak to General TempletonHaruko: He be General no more.
Larson: We know he ditched but we need his help.
Haruko: Isn’t this clichéd?
Larson: … No.
Haruko made her way up the stairs avoiding Naota’s underwear and other junk laying around. She quietly looked into the room and saw Mitch digging through Naota’s clothes. Haruko couldn’t help but watch and soon found herself wanting to watch.
Mitch finally got to the bottom and pulled out a magazine.
Mitch: Grow up my ass Naota! You’re the one with porn! Hah… what is this? Bondage? Eww… who would of thought Naota liked that? Who would of thought that I would be talking to myself anyways?
Haruko decided to walk in and she scared the shit out of him.
Mitch froze when he heard the footsteps.
Mitch: Naota… stay calm… this isn’t what you think… I’m just gunna’ get up and leave… Stay calm…
Haruko smirked finding this humorous. She tapped her foot to imitate Naota now to.
Mitch: Ok… um… DIE BASTARD!
To Haruko’s surprise he leaped up quickly landing on the top bunk agily.
Mitch: Didn’t know I could jump so hi-OH GOD I PULLED A MSUCLE!
As quickly as he was up he fell off with a crack.
Haruko: You might not wanna mess up Takkun’s magazines… I knew he’d grow up someday.
Mitch: Jesus! Agh! It hurts so bad!
Haruko: That’s cause you’re a dumb shit.
Mitch: Oh shut up. Let’s see another normal human jump 6 feet from a crouching position!
Haruko: Whatever. Phone call.
She hands him the phone. He could only look at her with a “WTF!?” Look because no one knew he was there.
Mitch: Um.. Hello?
Larson: JESUS! I SPENT 5 FUCKING MINUTES WAITING FOR YOU TO GET TO THE PHONE!
Mitch: Wow that sucks for you.
Larson: (clears throat) Well anyways. You know of the Chinese invasion…?
Mitch: Yes! They always squint at me! It’s like they can barley see! Like that Pokemon guy!
Larson: Ermm… ya ok. Well anyway. You are the old General Templeton?
Mitch froze for a moment.
Mitch: How did they know? Um… yes.
Larson: Thank god. We need your help! We hav-
Mitch: Hell no. After what you guys did to me… Never again.
Larson: Well we can pay you money.
Mitch: No.
Larson: Women?
Mitch:… No.
Larson: Men?
Mitch: … Dude. Im not gay.
Larson: Just checking.
Mitch: I am gunna kick his ass. Haha! Ok… Well give me all 50 state quarters!
Larson: Wha-What? Why that? ‘
Mitch: I have a quarter fetish.
Larson: Erm… ok… Done. Now will you help?
Mitch: No.
Mitch slams the phone and is about to leave when it rings again.
Mitch: Fine… what do you want.
: Tell Kamon Nandaba his blow up doll arrived.Mitch: Oo
: Oh… you arnt not the delivery boy. Oh well.He hangs it up and it rings once more.
Mitch: Haruko can you cut the line?
Haruko is now lying on her bunk.
Haruko: Nope. Talk to him.
Mitch picks up the phone.
Mitch: Larson?
Larson: Yes.
Mitch: I’ll help… If you give me a cookie.
Larson: What the fuck?
Mitch: I suddenly have a cookie craving.
Larson: DAMNIT! WE NEED YOU TO INFILTRATE A DAMNED CHINESE BASE AND RETRIEVE SOME IMPORTANT SHIT!
Mitch: Sure why not?
So our hero’s set off armed and loaded.
I am so fucking tired. Well… this will be my shortest chapter as it was more of an introduction. No flames please… please no flames. Yawn… neways I will update as soon as I get 5 reviews. I will use more descriptive language and add more character usage.
